Pitch - version 1 or 2?

Help me choose which one is the best PITCH.

Version 1 was my choice, but I've reworked it to make the conflict and the stakes a bit better defined.

Usually a PITCH is one paragraph long (more concise the better) but for a contest I'm entering they allow up to 300 words, title and word count must be included.

The first stage of the contest will be judged merely on the PITCH. F@#k that!

#1

At nearly thirty, Audrey is stumbling through her own life. Dejected and penniless, her drive has faded to nil.
When she posts on Facebook her frustration at being laid-off, a long-lost childhood friend offers her a gig to photograph his wannabe rock band on tour. Her Brazilian mother believes it’s fate; Audrey believes it’s the power of DSL.
Inside a run-down Winnebago with the all-male band, her cynicism is only matched by her fear of being taken for a groupie--a burden only lessened by tequila. Lots of tequila. Much to her dismay, she falls for the one member who keeps her at a distance. But John writes a song that reveals his pent-up emotions for her and propels the band to instant stardom.
In L.A., the unexpected attention on their love life hardly values the band’s talent. She decides to veer off in pursuit of her own accomplishments, which creates room for the complications of fame to creep in between her and John. Despite their immeasurable connection, they eventually find themselves facing jealousy, betrayal, and a gut-wrenching sorrow that could unravel their relationship.
ONE HIT WONDER, a 60,000-word contemporary novel, is a tale about the heartwarming moments that unfold at the speed of life and a dogged search for meaning that pulls everything together. At its heart, the story celebrates the bonds of love, which become the catalyst that solidifies a scattered soul.

#2

At nearly thirty, Audrey is stumbling through her own life. Dejected and penniless, her drive has faded to nil.
When she posts on Facebook her frustration at being laid-off, a long-lost childhood friend offers her a gig to photograph his wannabe rock band on tour. Her Brazilian mother believes it’s fate; Audrey believes it’s the power of DSL.
Inside a run-down Winnebago with the all-male band, her cynicism is only matched by her fear of being taken for a groupie--a burden only lessened by tequila. Lots of tequila. Despite her own resistance, she falls for the one member who gives her the brush-off. But John writes a song that reveals his pent-up emotions for her and propels the band to instant stardom.
In L.A., the unexpected attention on their love life hardly values the band’s talent, and she must choose between working with them or pursuing her own accomplishments; a decision that might create room for greedy manager Bill and envious P.R. executive Jennifer to creep in. Despite Audrey’s and John immeasurable connection, they find themselves facing betrayal and a gut-wrenching sorrow that could unravel their relationship.
ONE HIT WONDER, a 60,000-word contemporary novel, is a tale about the elusive sense of belonging, the heartwarming moments that unfold at the speed of life and a dogged search for meaning that pulls everything together. At its heart, the story celebrates the bonds of love, which become the catalyst to solidify a scattered soul.

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